Oh, the irony!

Posted on February 19, 2025 by Katherine Wikoff

Because many of the courses I teach in the User Experience (UX) program at Milwaukee School of Engineering are subjects that didn’t even really exist 40 years ago and are still growing and developing domain parameters by the day (e.g., Digital Society, Writing for Digital Media, Digital Storytelling), I subscribe to A LOT of newsletters and other publications to keep up.

This morning I was glad to see that one of my favorite general design publications had a new issue in my inbox. The title of one article especially intrigued me: “The UX Crisis: Why 1 in 3 digital experiences are failing (and how to fix it).”

So I clicked through.

Yes, definitely something I wanted to read!

Given that I am always looking for new design challeges for my students, and this article seemed to provide plenty of food for thought, I decided to print it out so I’d have the hard copy handy for marking up with my own notes.

Except, oh well.

My “user experience” of this article turned out to be a “fail” of the very type described therein.

The Promise (of the article’s commitment to good UX)

The Reality

The Excluded Text

Oops, it seems like Creative Boom is deliberately setting out to frustrate anyone trying to print the article (or save it as a PDF) and to ensure that the only way someone can “experience” their article is to read it on their website. To put it another way, by forcing a site-specific, digital-only experience on its users (for ad $$ reasons? for increasing pressure to become a subscriber, which I thought I was already anyway?), Creative Boom limits users’ ability to shape their own experiences of the text and creates unnecessary friction as a result.

Very frustrating and disappointing. I guess I won’t be carrying around and making notes on this article after all.

I hate pop-ups and constant harassment to “subscribe” or to “lock in a 10% discount with your first order” and all the similar in-your-face aggressions of this type that websites inflict on someone who just wants to read an article or look at a potential purchase. Maybe I’ll subscribe, maybe I’ll buy—but first I want to be able to check things out and think about it a little without having to fend off the hard sell.

Call it “site abandonment,” “drop off,” “bounce,” or whatever other term might seem relevant—my decision to leave the Creative Boom website and give up on any further study of or reflection on this piece is (in my opinion) exactly the type of UX “fail” that was the whole point in the first place.

And I guess I expect better from a design publication.

[UPDATE — But, silver lining: As soon as I pressed “publish” on this post, I realized that at least this whole experience has given me an idea for a new design challenge. So there’s that! 🙂 ]

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Sparkling snowfall on a brilliant, sunny day

Posted on February 16, 2025 by Katherine Wikoff

Captured on Broadway outside the Campus Center at Milwaukee School of Engineering after class late last week on the way back to my office (in the Grohmann Museum, the building seen at the left of this video). Sadly my phone didn’t capture the depth of this little snowburst, and this video is super short, sorry! But I’ve never seen anything quite like this before. At first I thought it was just snow being blown off of the trees or down from the building’s roof or maybe from the rooftops of passing cars, but it was far more sustained than that. Although you can see flashes of snow sparkling right in front of the camera, the actual impact in real life was really amazing, with glittering ice speckles flying on breezy sunlight all the way down the street.

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Success and Failure, Winners and Losers

Posted on February 6, 2025 by Katherine Wikoff

“You miss 100% of the shots you don’t take.” – Wayne Gretzky (MICHAEL SCOTT 😄)

Great quote, of course, but even more intriguing and inspiring to me is the original context in which Gretzky said it.

The passage below is from an article published in the New York Post a couple years ago (Link HERE):

The first documentation of this quote came in 1983 from Gretzky speaking to Bob McKenzie, then the editor of The Hockey News and now a commentator for TSN in Canada. Gretzky attempted the most shots in the league pretty much every season during this era, and MacKenzie asked him about it.

“You miss one hundred percent of the shots you don’t take,” Gretzky answered. “Even though there is only a 1-5 percent probably [sic] of scoring.”

Sad truth: It’s not uncommon for people to be judged negatively for having lots of failures sprinkled throughout the timeline of their careers. I initially read Gretzky’s stated sucess rate as “one in five,” or 20%, which sounded terrible enough. But no, he actually said a “1-5 percent” probability of scoring. Way worse! And yet, if you take enough shots, as Gretzky said, that 1-5% success rate can add up to a large number of goals (or other non-hockey achievements) overall.

This reminds me of another sports-related truth: As a batter, Babe Ruth held the career record for strikeouts (1,330) for many years until he was overtaken by Mickey Mantle (1,710) in 1964. Babe Ruth also held the home run record (714) for almost four decades after his 1935 retirement, finally ending when Hank Aaron hit his 715th homer in 1974.

So for almost 30 years, baseball’s weakest hitter by one measure was also its most powerful by another! Kind of crazy . . . and a comforting thought for those times when failures seem to be racking up left and right.

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Venus and Crescent Moon over Milwaukee

Posted on February 3, 2025 by Katherine Wikoff

I wish I also could have gotten Red Arrow Park’s ice skating rink at the bottom of this photo, but it was windy and cold, and I was walking to my parking garage after work. Plus this was the first time I’d used the camera in my new phone, so I wasn’t very quick and familiar with it yet. Even still, I loved the colors of everything here at twilight, and the silvery sliver of moon and bright light of Venus hanging above it all was worth stopping on the sidewalk for this past Friday evening to get a picture.

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Updated thoughts on ChatGPT’s “literary ending” to my novel scene

Posted on January 31, 2025 by Katherine Wikoff

UPDATE (meaning that yesterday’s “last thoughts” weren’t quite that, apparently 🙂 ) – It struck me this morning (the next day, after posting about ChatGPT’s edit of my novel scene yesterday) that my own ending was kind of upbeat and optimistic versus the ChatGPT rewrite that ended on a down note. I was going to add an update at the end of that post, but it got so long that I just decided to give space to it in a new post of its own.

Compare my original scene’s ending with ChatGPT’s revised ending.

My ending

Just for today, Jarrett decided in that split second. Just for today, he would enjoy being around her with no guilt and no worries about the future. Today was enough. Because in the end, he thought philosophically, moving toward the first mark as he and Taryn had practiced, “today” was all any of us really had anyway.

ChatGPT’s ending

Whatever this was between them, it couldn’t last. She was too young, their lives too different. When the cameras stopped, so would this.

The thought sat like a stone in his boot, impossible to shake.

My thoughts for future revisions

Remember, my original instruction to ChatGPT was:

Review and edit the following scene. My usual fault is over writing, especially using too much introspection, too much description, too much explaining, too much purple prose, for lack of a better word. Don’t over edit this scene but make any edits necessary to help it feel more literary and less like a trashy pulp novel.

It occurs to me that ChatGPTs more downbeat ending is doing exactly what I asked for: “to help it feel more literary.” Right? I don’t know why, but many of the “literary” short stories and novels I read are like that. Maybe it’s better artistically to have that “down” vibe going? But I have to think about 1) whether I want that vibe in my novel, 2) whether it fits Jarrett’s character and character arc, and 3) whether the dramatic arc of the scene, chapter, and storyline needs an “up” beat or a “down” beat in order for me to shape what I hope the reader’s experience of the novel will be.

Each of these scene endings would, of course, take place within the larger context of where the scene ultimately falls inside a chapter and inside the overall story. The scene itself is *sort of* modular, but not really. Because of the scattered way I work on this project (stealing time whenever I can from a very packed schedule), I’m writing many of my scenes as stand-alone units, but what this particular ChatGPT session has illustrated to me very clearly is that I can’t continue with the modular thinking for too much longer.

Why? Because a novel is an organic whole. It does not consist of interchangeable units. One scene flows into another, and if one scene ends on a down note, then somehow the next plot incident should either amplify that down note or reverse it, depending on the “journey” I want readers to take.

When I begin to construct the larger story arc for this section of my novel, I need to think about the dynamics of how each scene interacts with the others. Not only should I be thinking about the reader’s experience of moving through the plot’s action, but I also need to think more about Jarrett’s character arc. Is he an optimistic, high-agency person capable of willing himself to think/be/act in a certain way? Or, is he someone deficient in agency, too focused on negatives, with limited ability to envision much less move toward a better future? Where do I want him to start out as a character? Where do I want him to end up? And how will he move toward (and through) this change via the story’s plot events?

I don’t think I have anything super profound to add to this, except to say that it’s even more obvious to me now what the limits of ChatGPT are for writing. It’s the writer who needs to make decisions like the ones I described above. Once the writer has assessed the ChatGPT output and made revision decisions, they then need to communicate the new plan to ChatGPT and judge how well ChatGPT has executed the task before “recalculating” (the way GPS does when encountering an obstacle in the previously defined pathway) their “vision” for the overall piece again and moving into the next phase of crafting the text.

The writer remains at the center of the writing process, at least if the final text is going to be any good. ChatGPT truly is “just” a tool. A remarkable one, and quite fun to work with, but definitely not one capable of taking on all the work that a tired writer with a deadline might like to offload onto it.

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Writing exercise – “A Friend in Need” (Working ChatGPT from the other end)

Posted on January 30, 2025 by Katherine Wikoff

Another ChatGPT writing exercise to share today. Quick recap: Back in late September or early October, I began using ChatGPT to generate rough drafts of scenes for my novel in response to writing exercise prompts for my writing group’s bi-weekly meetings.

I’ve posted the results several times so far, always giving 1) the writing group’s assignment/prompt, 2) my prompt/instructions to ChatGPT for writing the scene, and 3) 1-3 draft iterations of the scene returned by ChatGPT. As I’ve noted, the ChatGPT-written scenes are definitely rough drafts in need of a good dose of editing and revisions on my end. But the great thing about ChatGPT is that it feels like a writing buddy, a thought partner who can take somewhat inarticulate ideas and generate a draft (a bad draft, but a draft nonetheless) at lightning speed. Then you at least have a jumping-off point that’s way farther along than you would have gotten otherwise.

This time, though, I decided to try using ChatGPT from the other direction, using it to revise my own prose. My biggest issue with writing fiction is overwriting (self-diagnosed, of course; others may find that my biggest issues lie in other areas, lol). Not only do I always feel the need to cut wordiness and streamline the text, but I also feel that my entire voice becomes too florid, too over-the-top dramatic, even to the point of melodrama. In trying to capture emotion, I end up slaughtering the mood with descriptive overkill. Nothing subtle about it at all.

So in the scene that follows, I’ll give you my own writing first, followed by my instructions to ChatGPT to please tone it (and pare it) down, and then finally the ChatGPT-edited scene at the end.

At first, on the day of writing group, when I read the scene aloud, I was really happy with the ChatGPT version. Gone was my junky overwritten description; in its place was a nice, succinct, smoothly flowing scene, with just the right balance of action, narrative description, and character introspection. But now, in looking back over my original scene, I kind of like some of the overwritten stuff.

This is instructive. Not only do I need to revise ChatGPT-generated rough drafts, but it also looks like I need to revise ChatGPT-edits of my own rough drafts, just to restore some of the “life” that, in my opinion, ChatGPT drains out.

See what you think. The first draft below is mine. Then is my prompt asking ChatGPT to edit/revise. Then comes the ChatGPT revision. Although it’s possible I’d prefer the ChatGPT-edited version again the next time I look it over, just as I did initially upon my first review, I’m fairly confident (at least right now) that I’ll prefer to continue revising the ChatGPT version to come up with something that’s more of a “happy medium” in the end, a Goldilocks “just right” version that tones down my embarrassing propensity to overwrite yet preserves some of the characters’ emotional substance and resonance (if that’s a word that fits?) that I’m also aiming at.

The prompt for my writing group was “a friend in need.” As with my other writing group exercises I’ve posted the past few months, I’ve tried to find a way to incorporate that prompt into a scene for my novel and then also to write my scene using ChatGPT, as a fun way of immersing myself in the technology in order to gain more practice with it (because as a college professor teaching courses in writing, content design/strategy, and digital society, I am learning all this new stuff on the fly and need to develop expertise like yesterday).

First, the usual disclaimer. This is a work of fiction. Names, characters, businesses, places, events, locales, and incidents are either the products of the author’s imagination or used in a fictitious manner. Any resemblance to actual persons, living or dead, or actual events is purely coincidental.

And now, my exercise 🙂

My prompt to ChatGPT, asking for editing of my initial (overwritten) draft

Review and edit the following scene. My usual fault is over writing, especially using too much introspection, too much description, too much explaining, too much purple prose, for lack of a better word. Don’t over edit this scene but make any edits necessary to help it feel more literary and less like a trashy pulp novel. Here it is:

Jarrett tilted the brim of his hat back and squinted at the markers lined up in the dirt. The heat of the New Mexico sun beat down, flattening the shadows and leaving no room to hide from its relentless glare.

Taryn crouched nearby, her small hands smoothing out a scuff one of the crew had left behind and replacing the beige golf tee that served as her mark. She looked so small in the harsh light, her slight frame swallowed up in a loose button-down and jeans. Fragile, like she’d blow away with the next gust of desert wind. But ten weeks into the shoot, Jarrett knew better. Taryn was one of the strongest people he’d ever seen.

“You’re still a step off here,” she said, standing and brushing the dust from her hands. Her voice was cheerful, no hint of frustration despite his inability to get it right. “Try walking it back again.”

Jarrett sighed but did as she asked, pacing backward along the imaginary trail she’d set for him, counting his steps until he hit the black golf tee that marked his own starting point. “Why does it even matter? Nobody’s looking at my feet anyway.”

“It’s not about your feet,” Taryn said, walking back to stand beside him. “It’s about timing. If you’re too late, the camera misses the turn. If you’re too early, the moment falls flat. It’s like you’re dancing with the camera.”

Jarrett raised a skeptical eyebrow. “Dancing?”

“Kind of. Except less fun and more yelling.”

Almost on cue, as if to illustrate her words, the faint sound of Cameron’s voice cut across the set, sharp and rising. Jarrett glanced over his shoulder toward the director, who was pacing back and forth, phone pressed to his ear. Even at a distance, Jarrett could see his agitation, the way he flung his free hand through the air, swatting invisible flies. The crew did a pretty good job of ignoring him and continuing their work, but even from a distance, Jarrett could feel the tension crackling in the air.

Taryn didn’t appear to notice. She simply adjusted her stance and motioned for Jarrett to follow her. “Okay,” she said. “This time, count your steps. You’ll stop here on ‘You’ve got a lot of nerve,’ and turn at—”

“‘—But so do I,’” Jarrett finished for her. He rubbed the back of his neck, feeling the weight of the sun and the lines he’d repeated so many times they’d lost meaning.

“Exactly.” Taryn beamed at him, and he felt that skittering sensation at the base of his sternum, like his heart had skipped a beat, which was becoming all too frequent lately whenever she smiled at him.

She moved in front of him, pointing to each mark in turn. “Let’s do it together. Walk with me, and I’ll count while you do your gestures and expression.”

Jarrett followed her lead, their feet crunching softly in the dry dirt. For a moment, it felt like they were two kids playing a game, her quick, light steps a rhythm he tried to match as they paced off his movements. He almost forgot why he’d been so frustrated.

He looked up as they walked, alerted as he hit the first mark by the imaginary sound of her arrival on horseback. Scowling, he stalked toward the camera, crossing his arms and tightening his jaw in outraged disbelief as he halted on the second mark.

“Now,” Taryn said, stopping with him. “Add the words.”

Jarrett conjured up a cynical smirk. “You’ve got a lot of nerve, Rose,” he drawled, injecting the line with all the cowboy grit he could muster.

Taryn tilted her head, lips pursed. “Maybe less John Wayne and more . . . just you. Mean it. Like what you told me about singing.”

Hearing his own advice turned around like that clicked. He went again, this time trying to feel the emotion and letting the scripted words roll out naturally like they were his own. Taryn’s face lit up with approval, and he felt that disconcerting flutter again.

“Beautiful,” Taryn said. “Now hit the next mark while I’m saying my lines, then grab my hand and pull me toward you the moment I’ve closed the gate.”

As they ran through it again, he was gratified to see all the various parts—the marks, the actions, the lines—begin falling into place, fitting together smoothly and naturally. It was like dancing, like finally knowing the steps well enough to transcend them and become lost in the movement.

It felt good.

Even better, it felt real.

Cameron’s voice broke through their rhythm, cutting through the set like a whip. “No, no, NO!” he shouted, and then, louder: “A friend in need is a pain in the ass!”

Jarrett froze, his boot skidding slightly in the dirt. Taryn looked up, her lips twitching. Their eyes met, and in an instant, they were both stifling laughter.

“I don’t think Cameron understands that saying,” Taryn murmured, a mischievous light in her eyes.

Jarrett snorted. “I don’t think Cameron understands a lot of things.”

They shared a conspiratorial grin as Cameron stormed off the set still arguing on the phone. Jarrett’s gaze drifted past him toward Taryn’s mother, Michelle, seated under a canopy at the edge of the set. Day after day she sat there, unmoving and expressionless, her face hidden behind oversized sunglasses, long blonde hair gleaming in the sunlight.

As Jarrett watched, Michelle raised the metal water bottle in her hand, the only movement she ever seemed to make, and took a casual sip. He couldn’t help but wonder—again—if it was spiked. He doubted there was much of anything hydrating in that bottle.

He huffed a short, humorless chuckle, grimacing at the turn his thoughts had taken. Took one to know one, apparently.

Taryn had apparently heard because he saw her look his way expectantly.

“Is she okay?” he asked, nodding toward Michelle to avoid the scrutiny of those too-knowing silver eyes.

Taryn followed his gaze, her smile dimming slightly. “I don’t know. It’s complicated.”

Jarrett didn’t push. There was something in her voice—matter of fact but protective—that he was coming to understand. Taryn had a way of deflecting questions about her mom, like she’d built a wall around whatever was really going on.

He tried to think of a new topic, but Taryn got there first. She pointed discreetly toward the camera. “Look who’s back and pretending that whole phone debacle never happened,” she said.

Jarrett glanced over. Cameron was engaged in a quiet but serious-looking conversation with Tony, the assistant director. He must have skirted behind the building facades and trees to get there without returning the way he’d left.

“Ready to try it again?” Taryn asked, turning back to him.

Jarrett nodded, feeling the familiar tension rise. If Cameron was finished with his phone call, he’d probably be ready to shoot soon and complaining loudly to the entire set about how he’d gotten stuck with a hapless musician as his lead actor.

He hated how incompetent Cameron made him feel.

But as he and Taryn rehearsed, Jarrett felt the tension ease. Taryn’s calm, steady presence was soothing and allowed him to slow down his thoughts enough to get out of his own head. He found himself detaching, watching her more than the markers. The way her hair caught the light when she moved, the curve of her smile when she thought he’d nailed a line, the effortless way she made him feel like he wasn’t completely out of his depth. Taryn was the one person on this chaotic set who didn’t make him feel like he was failing. She didn’t have to help him with his acting—she could’ve left him to flounder—but she didn’t seem to mind. She made it seem easy, like she even enjoyed it.

“Jarrett.” Taryn’s voice pulled him back.

“Yeah?”

“You’re getting it,” she said, smiling.

Jarrett grinned back, knowing it was true. In the last run-though he’d hit all the marks, said all the lines right, and felt all his emotions in exactly the correct sequence.

“It’s like floating,” he said. “Like hitting the high note. Like great . . . “

Sex.

“Dancing,” he finished smoothly, hoping to erase the unspoken word he’d left hanging.

Thankfully, Taryn didn’t seem to notice. She gave his hands a quick squeeze, which then made him realize he hadn’t let go of hers when their scene ended. An urgent impulse to release them now seized him. But he resisted, for she would wonder why, might feel rejected and hurt. Instead, the moment lingered, and they stood in the center of the dusty corral, hands clasped, smiling at each other.

Ah, Taryn’s smile. He loved the way it transformed her already beautiful features into something even more exquisite, something magical and ethereal. There was no other way to describe it. When she smiled, she was radiant, and her strange, silver eyes shone with an otherworldly glow. Everyone liked Taryn; she had a talent for putting people at ease. Even the grumpiest members of the crew found it impossible to remain surly around her. Her cheerfulness was uplifting and made everyone want to be better, including him. No one could resist her light-filled smiles.

Lately, though, those smiles had started doing funny things to his heart.

He kept finding excuses to be around her. Although he was grateful for her help with his acting, what really mattered was simply being near her. Some mornings, when he was especially miserable about being stuck on the show, the prospect of seeing Taryn was the only thing that got him out of bed.

She fascinated him. The feathery whisper of her voice, the crisp, delicate line of her jaw. Her slender hands and wrists, encircled by their sliver-thin turquoise and silver bracelets. The auburn streaks that had developed in her long, dark hair under the New Mexico sun. Her skin had darkened, too, heightening the contrast of those silver eyes under the dark slash of her brows.

And then the discomfort settled in, like a stone in his boot.

She was just a kid. Or at least, that’s what he kept telling himself. But Taryn was everything he hadn’t known he needed: patient, kind, someone who truly saw him. He felt drawn to her despite his stern resolve to keep his distance. Her gentle inner light, the way she seemed to see beauty in everything awakened his protective instincts and made him feel things he wasn’t sure he should.

Things he didn’t want to feel. That might be wrong.

Things he didn’t want her to know.

They were still holding hands and gazing into each other’s eyes. Next week she would turn eighteen, one part of his mind rationalized, which another part of him immediately rejected with disgust. God, he was no better than Cameron!

Jarrett let go of her hands and glanced away, the realization settling heavy in his chest. What was he doing? Taryn was his “friend in need,” his lifeline in this mess of a job. Whatever this feeling was growing between them, it couldn’t last, shouldn’t even be acknowledged.

She was too young, their lives were too different, and once the cameras stopped rolling, she’d go her way, and he’d go his.

He could hardly bear the thought.

Just then, the assistant director called for quiet on the set, and everyone started getting ready for the next take. Taryn smiled encouragingly up at Jarrett as they walked back into position and surrendered themselves to quick last looks from hair, makeup, and wardrobe.

She didn’t know, Jarrett realized with sudden relief. It was a gift. He could still turn things around. He resolved to see her as the young girl she still was. They would be friends. She would continue helping him with his acting, and he would keep teaching her guitar.

“Lock it down,” called the AD. The extras took up their places behind them, lounging along the fence and beside the shed.

Jarrett glanced at Taryn. Her eyes were closed, and he knew she had gone to that place inside herself to find her character. He should be doing that, too. But the truth was, unlike Taryn, who bore virtually no resemblance to Rose, Jarrett was never anything other than himself. He wasn’t an actor; he was a musician. And no one expected anything more than that except Taryn. She seemed completely confident that he could become Sam.

Despite how much he disliked doing the show and despised Cameron, Jarrett nonetheless found himself looking forward to each day. No matter how foolish, he wanted to live up to Taryn’s earnest belief in him.

“Rolling!” called the AD.

“Speed!” called the camera operator and sound mixer in response. A crew member announced the scene and take, then clapped the slate in front of the camera. The AD called for quiet on the set, and an eerie silence descended as everyone waited for Cameron’s signal for action.

Time hung, suspended.

ChatGPT said:

This scene has great potential, with strong character dynamics and an engaging setting. However, it does suffer from the issues you flagged: over-explaining, excess introspection, and a tendency to belabor descriptions or emotions. Below is a revised version with tighter prose, clearer focus, and a more literary tone, while retaining the heart of your story.

Jarrett tipped his hat back and squinted at the markers lined up in the dirt. The New Mexico sun beat down, flattening shadows and leaving no room to hide.

Taryn crouched nearby, smoothing out a scuff in the dust and resetting the beige golf tee that marked her spot. She looked small in the harsh light, her slight frame swallowed up in loose clothes. Fragile, Jarrett thought—but ten weeks into the shoot, he knew better. Taryn was steel wrapped in sunlight.

“You’re still a step off here,” she said, standing and brushing her hands. Her voice was cheerful, free of frustration despite his repeated missteps. “Try walking it back again.”

Jarrett sighed but did as she asked, pacing back along the imaginary trail, counting steps until he hit his mark. “Why does it even matter? Nobody’s looking at my feet.”

“It’s not about your feet,” Taryn said, joining him. “It’s about timing. If you’re too late, the camera misses the turn. Too early, and the moment falls flat. It’s like dancing with the camera.”

“Dancing?” He raised a skeptical eyebrow.

“Less fun, more yelling,” she replied, just as a sharp voice cut through the set.

Jarrett glanced toward the director, Cameron, pacing in the distance with a phone pressed to his ear. Even from here, his agitation was obvious—wild hand gestures swatting invisible flies. The crew worked around him, heads down, but the tension rippled across the dusty lot.

Taryn didn’t seem to notice. She adjusted her stance, motioning for Jarrett to follow. “Count your steps. Stop on ‘You’ve got a lot of nerve,’ and turn at—”

“‘But so do I,’” Jarrett finished. He rubbed his neck, the heat and endless repetition draining the life from the lines.

“Exactly.” Taryn smiled, and something skittered in his chest—a too-frequent sensation these days.

She walked ahead, pointing to each marker. “Let’s do it together. Walk with me.”

Jarrett followed, their footsteps crunching in the dirt. For a moment, it felt like a game, her light steps setting a rhythm he matched instinctively. The frustration ebbed.

He hit his first mark and scowled, imagining the camera’s frame. His lines came easier this time, the smirk more natural.

“You’ve got a lot of nerve, Rose,” he said, the drawl effortless now.

Taryn tilted her head. “Less John Wayne. Just you. Mean it.”

Hearing his own advice echoed back startled him. This time, he let the words roll out as if they were his own. Taryn’s face lit up, and there was that flutter again, maddeningly out of his control.

“Beautiful,” she said. “Now hit the next mark after I close the gate.”

The scene clicked, piece by piece, until it flowed naturally. It was like dancing, Jarrett thought. The steps melted away, leaving only the movement.

Cameron’s voice cracked through their rhythm. “No, no, NO!” He bellowed louder, “A friend in need is a pain in the ass!”

Jarrett froze, his boot skidding in the dirt. Taryn looked up, lips twitching. Their eyes met, and they stifled laughter.

“I don’t think Cameron understands that saying,” she murmured.

“Cameron doesn’t understand a lot of things,” Jarrett replied, his voice low.

Their shared grin lingered, but Jarrett’s gaze drifted to the edge of the set, where Michelle, Taryn’s mother, sat beneath a canopy. Day after day, she was a fixture, unmoving, her face hidden behind sunglasses, blonde hair gleaming in the sun.

Michelle raised a metal water bottle and took a slow sip. Jarrett’s mouth twisted. He doubted hydration was the goal.

“She okay?” he asked, nodding toward her.

Taryn followed his gaze, her smile dimming. “I don’t know. It’s complicated.”

Jarrett didn’t press. Taryn guarded her mother’s secrets like precious cargo, deflecting questions with quiet finality.

She gestured toward the camera. “Look who’s back, pretending nothing happened.”

Cameron had returned, deep in conversation with the assistant director. His earlier theatrics were wiped clean, as if erased by sheer will.

“Ready to go again?” Taryn asked, turning back to Jarrett.

He nodded, though tension coiled in his chest. Cameron would expect perfection, eager to remind everyone how unqualified the “musician” was for this role.

But as they rehearsed, the pressure receded. Taryn’s steady presence was an anchor. She didn’t just help—she made it feel easy, even enjoyable.

“Jarrett.”

“Yeah?”

“You’re getting it,” she said, smiling.

He was, he realized. “It’s like floating,” he said, wonder creeping into his voice. “Like hitting the high note. Like—”

Sex.

“Dancing,” he finished hastily.

Taryn didn’t seem to notice. She squeezed his hands briefly, grounding him, but didn’t pull away. The moment lingered, and Jarrett felt the weight of it settle, heavy and undeniable.

He stepped back, breaking the connection. Taryn’s eyes flickered with hurt, and guilt twisted in his chest.

Whatever this was between them, it couldn’t last. She was too young, their lives too different. When the cameras stopped, so would this.

The thought sat like a stone in his boot, impossible to shake.

My last thoughts

I do like the flow of the ChatGPT revision, as I said earlier. I like how streamlined it is. It doesn’t embarrass me the way my original rough draft’s overdone description does. But now I want some of the emotion and too-flowery description back. Figuring out the “good stuff” and leaving the majority behind will be a challenge.

But as William Faulkner said, you have to kill your darlings. Or murder them. Whatever he said. (Although, side note: Have you read William Faulkner? I don’t see much evidence of darling-killing in his dense prose. Imagine what it was like before the edits!)

If I ever finish my novel and publish it, you can decide for yourself how skillfully I wielded the scalpel.

UPDATE (So, not quite my last thoughts apparently 🙂 ) – It struck me this morning (the next day, after posting this yesterday) that my own ending was kind of upbeat and optimistic versus the ChatGPT rewrite that ended on a down note. I was going to add an update at the end of this post, but it got so long that I just decided to give space to it in a post of its own. Check out my new thoughts in the post dated January 31, 2025.

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Extinction immanent? (and imminent?) Michael Crichton on “cyberspace” dooming human innovation/evolution and forecasting the end of the species

Posted on January 29, 2025 by Katherine Wikoff

I’m teaching “Digital Society” this semester, and as fate would have it, over my holiday break I decided to read Michael Crichton’s The Lost World, a novel I’d never read before even though I love Michael Crichton and have probably read everything else he’s written.

I said “as fate would have it,” because if I’d read this book when it came out thirty (30!!!) years ago, I might not have paid as much attention to Ian Malcolm’s monologue/lecture on chaos and evolution. Crichton manages to insert this lengthy “idea” passage pretty effectively plotwise during a convenient breather in the otherwise nonstop action. Instead of pedantic background narrative, Crichton positions this “rant” as a rather endearing one-sided stream of consciousness “conversation” Malcolm has with Sarah Harding arising from the morphine haze she’s put him into while she’s fixing his injured leg (broken, I think, but that was a couple weeks ago, and there’s a lot of action, injury, and death in this book—hard to keep it all straight 🙂 ).

Ian Malcolm’s ideas seem chillingly prescient considering the massive sway the internet holds over human society today and particularly given the hyper-fast cycles of AI development we’ve seen in the past couple of years. Much to think about here, especially as we (collectively, as humans) have a vested interest in extending the duration of human existence and human reign over the planet as long as possible.

Here’s the quote that caught my eye. This passage may seem long, but it is just a fraction of Malcolm’s entire speech. Fascinating stuff. I love how Crichton can deliver such intellectual ideas in a way that feels natural and makes learning and thinking about complex topics so easy!

“[…P] ersonally, I think cyberspace means the end of our species.”

“Yes? Why is that?”

“Because it means the end of innovation,” Malcolm said. “This idea that the whole world is wired together is mass death. Every biologist knows that small groups in isolation evolve fastest. You put a thousand birds on an ocean island and they’ll evolve very fast. You put ten thousand on a big continent, and their evolution slows down. Now, for our own species, evolution occurs mostly through our behavior. We innovate new behavior to adapt. And everybody on earth knows that innovation only occurs in small groups. Put three people on a committee and they may get something done. Ten people, and it gets harder. Thirty people, and nothing happens. Thirty million, it becomes impossible. That’s the effect of mass media—it keeps anything from happening. Mass media swamps diversity. It makes every place the same. Bangkok or Tokyo or London: there’s a McDonald’s on one corner, a Benetton on another, a Gap across the street. Regional differences vanish. All differences vanish. In a mass-media world, there’s less of everything except the top ten books, records, movies, ideas. People worry about losing species diversity in the rain forest. But what about intellectual diversity – our most necessary resource? That’s disappearing faster than trees. But we haven’t figured that out, so now we’re planning to put five billion people together in cyberspace. And it’ll freeze the entire species. Everything will stop dead in its tracks. Everyone will think the same thing at the same time. Global uniformity. [..]”

― Michael Crichton, The Lost World, published in 1995

‘The Lost World’ – Michael Crichton

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Waiting (for the elevator)

Posted on January 27, 2025 by Katherine Wikoff

A photo I took the other day as I was walking to the printer. It’s a view looking through the glass walls of the elevator shaft into the atrium of the Grohmann Museum in Milwaukee. The strong vertical lines and contrasting colors (dark metal foreground with washed out pastel blues and whites beyond) caught my eye. That’s all 🙂

Steel lines of glass elevator shaft looking out into atrium and beyond to office building

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Writing exercise – “Christmas Gathering” (yes, another ChatGPT adventure)

Posted on December 17, 2024 by Katherine Wikoff

Well, I’m starting to see ChatGPT’s tics and tells more clearly. On the plus side, this tool works well as a means of

casting a wide research net
quickly executing a rough draft
providing “feedback” and suggestions for oneself on a rough draft
showing (and “forcing”) connections between random ideas
editing documents for length
editing documents for style

Beyond that, though, generative AI is definitely limited. There’s a reason why the early ChatGPT-written student papers stuck out so baldly (and badly 🙂 ). ChatGPT can’t write worth a damn beyond its specific and rather limited skillset. It does a poor job of following instructions, and when it takes the initiative and offers up text unrequested by the prompt, you need to approach those results with skepticism.

On the other hand, as Karen and I agreed on Saturday (when we were the only two people able to make it to our writing group meeting), first drafts are always crummy anyway, and ChatGPT at least returns a crummy first draft with lightning speed. After you spend a fair amount of time creating a good prompt, that is.

So for this week’s meeting, I decided to keep going with my experiment in having ChatGPT write first drafts for the section of my novel I’m currently working on. And this week, the “machinery” of the technology’s “works” was on full display, a disenchantment akin to a child’s sighting of the wires underpinning a magician’s trick.

For example, as in other outings, ChatGPT ignored quite a few of my instructions, which was frustrating because I went to a certain amount of trouble of coming up with them in the first place. Ignoring instructions seems to be a common flaw in the tool, so you can’t just set things up and think you’re done. You need to be “on” enough, and know enough, to catch that the result returned is not all it should have been.

Similarly, stylistically, ChatGPT leaned far too heavily on sentimentality, similies, participial phrases, and adverbs in general. This tendancy to drift into florid prose, in fact, is one of the “tics” I referred to earlier.

In my second exercise draft, ChatGPT also completely screwed up the timeline of the Christmas gathering, having one person enjoying her gift before she even received it and having another person conversing with the other guests around the tree before he even came into the house out of the snowstorm!

One last, little thing that will continue to nag at me until I fix it is ChatGPT’s mention of the “buttery scent” of freshly popped corn that Addy and Mrs. Hudson are stringing on thread to create a garland. “Buttery” corn on a garland? I tried to fix it by telling ChatGPT that the popcorn was dry, but ChatGPT came back with “the smell of dry popcorn” in the next draft, lol, so in revising, I need to remember to switch it to something like “the smell of freshly popped corn.” Maybe plain, freshly popped corn does have a “buttery scent,” but all I could picture was greasy fingers making a slimy mess of my simple, traditional strand of popcorn and cranberries.

One observation, neither complaint nor praise: ChatGPT added an interesting “volunteer” item beyond the scope of what I’d asked for, in the form of affixing a tag/heading that read, “Christmas Gathering,” at the top of my third (and final) exercise draft.

On the positive side, I continue to delight in little surprises and moments of serendipity in the text that ChatGPT returns:

Mrs. Hudson worrying about Mr. Freeman and wanting to “box his ears” (a phrase I recognized as 1930s appropriate and might not have thought of myself) for his rufusing her offer of coffee in conjunction with his stubborn insistence on shoveling snow
Mr. Freeman’s “usual armchair” (a nice touch suggesting backstory and context)
Lorna Rooney’s “quick, sharp fingers” (she’s a bank teller)
Mr. Delaney treating Mrs. Hudson like a waitress (“Coffee, Myrna?”)
Lorna’s clever quips of “advice” in the notebook she gives Addy (reminding me a bit of the old Burma-Shave road signs of that same era)

So, yes, I’m having a lot of fun with this.

In an interesting aside, my freshman composition students have done some exploratory work with ChatGPT this past semester, and while the tool definitely helped them find unusual, interesting topics and broadened their research, they have also discovered for themselves that ChatGPT is not that helpful for writing papers. That is, ChatGPT sets essays up to move along a rigid, mundane path and student writers end up feeling “trapped” in drafts they don’t have the skills to escape. It was exciting for me as a teacher to see that students could recognize how bad the ChatGPT drafts were and then conclude on their own that the tool might be more of a hindrance than a benefit, in that application anyway.

But all of that is a post for another day. For now, I just want to share my most recent writing exercise and the rough drafts generated by ChatGPT.

And now, my exercise 🙂

From my email to my writing group about our prompt for this week’s exercise:

I’m supposed to send out our next exercise, so here it is. I couldn’t decide on what prompt to use. I wanted to get fancy, do something like the Ursula Le Guin exercises we did for a while, but my week has been too hectic to get a handle on that. So, I came up with three potential “word” starters that seemed related to the season and couldn’t decide on just one, so here are all three. Pick just one, use two, or mash up all three in there together. Your choice😀

Fizzy sparkle
Redolence
White elephant

My initial prompt to ChatGPT

This next scene continues the story of Addy. It is approaching Christmas in December 1936. The boarders have gathered around the Christmas tree on the Sunday evening before Christmas (which will be the upcoming Friday, December 25). They are having a white elephant gift exchange.

Earlier that day Mrs. Hudson popped some corn, and she and Addy sat at the kitchen table, stringing garlands of fluffy white popcorn and deep red cranberries, while they talked about life. Addy talks about her new friend, Hazel. Show a brief flashback of that earlier conversation. It is still snowing. It began snowing yesterday and has not let up. There are several inches of snow on the ground. Mr. Freeman was kind enough to shovel the front walks so people could get out to church. Addy worries because he is old, but Mrs. Hudson scoffs at that, saying Mr. Freeman is still strong as an ox and could probably still carry a load of bricks the same as any of the younger men on a job. Still, Addy notices a look of worry briefly trouble her features before she clearly and deliberately appears to shrug away the though with another nearly imperceptible flicker of expression.

Hazel gave Addy a Mason jar, with a festive plaid ribbon tied around the neck, filled with peanut butter fudge. Addy is knitting Hazel a scarf of very fine, soft yarn, with the tiniest needles she’s ever seen. Mrs. Hudson is quite the expert knitter, with a collection of yarn, needles, and a fancy, scientific looking wheel that helps you match up your yarn with the perfect gauge knitting needles. The outer rim of the wheel has holes where you stick your knitting needle in, and then you spin the bar that’s anchored with a brass eyelet at the center of the circle to see what type of yarn to use. The scarf Addy is knitting is very fine, and she is excited to give it to Hazel. Hazel is the first true friend Addy has made.

There is also a boy that Addy has a crush on. She told Mrs. Hudson while they were stringing garlands that he walked her to her locker after their class together and waited for her while she got her coat, then walked with her to the front door, where they parted ways. Mrs. Hudson told Addy she admired Addy for finishing high school, when so many children leave school after elementary school. “A high school diploma is your ticket to a brighter future, Addy,” she told her. Addy plans to give Hazel the scarf at school on Wednesday, their last day before the Christmas break. She hopes she can finish it in time.

Segueing to the gathering of boarders around the tree that evening, Addy is knitting while participating in the exchange. She and Mrs. Hudson baked Christmas cookies and gingerbread the day before, after Addy got home from work at the men’s clothing store. Mr. Delaney arrives, shaking off the snow from his coat in the entrance hall, jovially complaining about the snow and the road conditions. Addy thinks about how Mrs. Hudson will shortly return, after hanging up his things, to mop up the wet floor from the melting snow he has tracked in, and how she (Addy) would have entered through the back door to save Mrs. Hudson the trouble of cleaning up her mess. She has noticed his lack of consideration before, but no one else seems to notice or mind, including Mrs. Hudson.

Lots of inconsequential but cheerful conversation ensues as the boarders gather around the tree, listening to the radio playing quietly in the background. They eat cookies, drink cocoa and coffee (which Mrs. Hudson makes for Mr. Delaney, at his request), and exchange their white elephant gifts. Each person has a small gift for all the other boarders, and each gift is appropriate for the recipient, either as a gag or in a small, thoughtful way. Keep in mind each person’s job and personality. Lorna is a bank teller and is dedicated to her job, a team spirit kind of person. She is fashionable, has a sharp tongue, likes to suck on lemon drops. Mr. Freeman lost his wife to influenza several years ago, but he has a group of buddies, also retired from the construction trades, that he meets regularly for an evening of cards and or an afternoon of front porch conversations. Mrs. Hudson likes to knit, and she makes things for an orphanage in Huntington, West Virginia. Mr. Delaney is handsome, relatively young (early thirties), a travelling salesman, selling ladies hosiery to department stores. He is a smooth-talking flirt, a bit of a know-it-all. He has dates with an ever-changing cast of ladies in town, although some women appear to be regulars, and Addy suspects he has similar arrangements in every city he travels to. She is slightly disgusted by him, even as she is fascinated and also finds herself drawn in by his charm.

After the gift giving is over, Addy tells the others she must head upstairs to bed, for tomorrow is a school day. Before she goes, Mrs. Hudson hands her an envelope. It is addressed to her, Mrs. Hudson, and has already been opened, but inside is another envelope, addressed to Addy. It is a Christmas card from her parents, telling her in a very cheerful tone about their adventures in Mississippi and how they are looking forward to pecan pie on Christmas Eve at their favorite diner. Addy remembers that pie; her mouth waters. Then Mrs. Hudson gives Addy a box, that turns out to be filled with pecans so that Addy can enjoy a taste of Christmas with them. Mrs. Hudson tells her she will bake them into a pie for Christmas Day. Addy knows she is about to cry, so she bids everyone a hasty good night and climbs the three flights of stairs to her room. Only after she is in bed and drifting off to sleep does it occur to her to wonder why her Christmas card was enclosed inside an envelope to Mrs. Hudson.

ChatGPT said:

The snow still fell, thick and steady, as Addy and Mrs. Hudson sat at the kitchen table Sunday afternoon, stringing garlands of popcorn and cranberries. The warm, buttery scent of freshly popped corn lingered in the air, mingling with the earthy tang of cranberries. Addy’s fingers worked carefully, pushing the needle through the soft popcorn and the firm, glossy berries, enjoying the rhythmic task.

“It looks beautiful,” Mrs. Hudson said, her gaze flicking between the garland in Addy’s hands and the growing pile on the table. “Hazel will love that scarf you’re making. It’s delicate work, but you’re doing a fine job.”

Addy beamed. “I hope she likes it. She gave me fudge, you know—a whole Mason jar full.”

“With a ribbon on top, no less,” Mrs. Hudson added, her tone amused. “That girl has a good heart.”

“She does,” Addy said, a warmth spreading through her chest. “She’s the first real friend I’ve had.”

Mrs. Hudson paused for a moment, as though weighing her words. “Good friends don’t come along every day. Hold on to that.”

They worked in companionable silence for a while, the snow outside casting a soft glow through the frosted window. Then Addy hesitated, biting her lip before speaking again. “There’s… a boy.”

Mrs. Hudson’s eyes twinkled. “I thought there might be. Tell me about him.”

Addy ducked her head, cheeks flushing. “His name’s Billy. He walked me to my locker after class on Friday. Then he waited while I got my coat and walked me to the door.”

Mrs. Hudson smiled knowingly. “He sounds like a gentleman. And you sound like a girl who’s juggling school, work, and knitting but still finds time to notice the good ones. That’s no small thing, Addy.”

Later that evening, the parlor hummed with the chatter and laughter of the boarders, gathered around the Christmas tree for the white elephant exchange. The radio played softly in the background, a cheerful medley of carols.

Addy sat on the rug near the fire, her knitting needles clicking steadily as she worked on Hazel’s scarf. Lorna Rooney lounged in an armchair, idly twirling a lemon drop wrapper between her fingers, while Mr. Freeman sat nearby, regaling Mrs. Hudson with a story about a card game he’d played with his old construction buddies.

The front door opened with a gust of cold air and a flurry of snow, and Mr. Delaney strode in, stamping his boots. “Would you look at that snow? It’s like the road’s trying to swallow my car whole!” He shook off his coat, sending droplets of water onto the tiled entryway.

Addy glanced up from her knitting, thinking how Mrs. Hudson would soon be back with a mop to clean up the mess. She would never say a word about it, but Addy noticed. She’d come in through the back door herself earlier to avoid just this sort of trouble.

“Oh, Delaney,” Mrs. Hudson called from her perch by the fire, “come have a seat before you freeze. I’ll get you some coffee.”

Addy suppressed a sigh. Delaney’s charm never failed to get him exactly what he wanted.

The gift exchange was a merry affair. Lorna received a tin of lemon drops from Mr. Freeman, who chuckled as she held it aloft like a trophy. Addy gave Mr. Delaney a new tie—a bright red one, as gaudy as his personality—and received a small notebook from Lorna, the cover embossed with gold letters that read, For All Your Brilliant Ideas. When Addy opened it, she found that every other page had been pre-filled with good-natured advice, like Never trust a man who talks faster than he walks.

As the laughter died down and the last cookie crumbs were brushed from laps, Addy stood and stretched. “I’d better get to bed. School tomorrow.”

“Wait a moment,” Mrs. Hudson said, pulling an envelope from the mantel. “This came for you.”

Addy’s brow furrowed as she took it. It was addressed to Mrs. Hudson but held another envelope inside—one with her name scrawled in her mother’s familiar handwriting. She opened it carefully, revealing a cheerful Christmas card inside. Her parents wrote about their adventures in Mississippi, describing their plans for Christmas Eve at a favorite diner where they would eat pecan pie.

Her stomach growled at the memory of that pie. Before she could linger too long on the thought, Mrs. Hudson handed her a small box. Addy opened it to find it brimming with pecans.

“I thought you’d like a taste of home,” Mrs. Hudson said. “I’ll bake them into a pie for Christmas Day.”

Overwhelmed, Addy nodded quickly. “Thank you. I—I’d better go.” She clutched the card and the box to her chest and hurried up the stairs, her throat tight with emotion.

By the time she climbed into bed, the soft rustle of the snow outside had joined the steady rhythm of her thoughts. As she drifted off, a question surfaced in her mind: why had her Christmas card been sent to Mrs. Hudson? The thought lingered briefly before fading into the warmth of sleep.

I said:

Mr. Delaney should be called “Mr.” although his first name is Frank, and the other boarders and Mrs. Hudson can call him Frank. Addy thinks of him as Mr. Delaney. Mrs. Hudson’s first name is Myrna. Again, the others may occasionally call her that, but to Addy she is only Mrs. Hudson. The pecans are from Addy’s parents. The conversation between Addy and Mrs. Hudson in the kitchen should be a little more nuanced. The snow outside is not a quiet snowfall, but a blustery, windy, wet snow. Include some mention of Mr. Freeman’s snow shoveling and his meetings with cronies. The popcorn is dry, not buttered. Addy is not knitting while stringing popcorn, but she runs upstairs to retrieve the scarf to show Mrs. Hudson at some point during the garland making session

ChatGPT said:

The snow blew against the kitchen window in thick, wet swirls, driven by gusts that made the panes rattle. Inside, the kitchen was cozy and warm, the smell of dry popcorn mingling with the tang of cranberries as Addy and Mrs. Hudson sat stringing garlands at the scarred oak table.

Addy picked up another piece of popcorn, careful not to crush it as she threaded it onto the fine needle. “I hope Hazel likes the scarf. It’s taking forever, but I’m almost done.”

Mrs. Hudson glanced over her glasses, her hands steady as she worked. “Hazel strikes me as the sort who’ll appreciate the thought—and the effort. What color is it again?”

“Soft gray,” Addy said, her voice bright. “It’s the nicest yarn I’ve ever used. Want to see it?” Without waiting for a reply, she jumped up and ran upstairs. She returned moments later with the scarf, draped it over her arm, and held it out.

Mrs. Hudson took it, running her fingers lightly over the fine stitches. “This is beautiful work, Addy. You’ve got a good eye for detail. Hazel’s lucky to have a friend like you.”

Addy blushed, but the compliment warmed her. “She gave me a jar of fudge tied with a ribbon. I’ve never had a friend like her before.”

“Well,” Mrs. Hudson said, threading a cranberry onto her needle with practiced precision, “good friends are worth holding on to. Just like a good scarf on a night like this.”

Outside, the wind howled, carrying the occasional rumble of snowplows from the main street. “Do you think Mr. Freeman’s warm enough?” Addy asked, glancing toward the window.

Mrs. Hudson chuckled, but a faint shadow crossed her face. “Warm enough? That man shoveled the walks this morning like he was twenty years younger. Told me he’d worked up such a sweat he had to take his hat off. Strong as an ox, that one, even if he won’t admit his knees creak.” She tied off the end of her garland and started another. “Still, I’d like to box his ears for refusing the coffee I offered him after. Stubborn as the day is long.”

Addy smiled but didn’t miss the flicker of worry that briefly softened Mrs. Hudson’s usually shrewd features. “He’s always meeting his friends for cards or sitting on someone’s porch talking. I think he keeps going because he’s afraid to stop.”

Mrs. Hudson nodded. “You’re not wrong. Work, even if it’s shoveling snow, gives a person a reason to get out of bed.”

Addy hesitated, looking down at her hands. “That’s what you said about finishing school, isn’t it? That it gives me a reason?”

Mrs. Hudson met her gaze, her tone matter-of-fact. “It does. A high school diploma is more than a piece of paper, Addy. It’s a door. And it’s worth walking through, even if it takes effort to get there.”

Addy nodded, the thought settling over her like a second layer of warmth.

By evening, the parlor was filled with the cheerful chaos of the boarders gathering for the white elephant exchange. The Christmas tree stood in the corner, the garlands of popcorn and cranberries winding around its branches. The radio hummed softly in the background, and the table was laden with cookies and cups of cocoa.

Mr. Freeman sat in his usual armchair, recounting a story about his construction days, his voice rising and falling like the rhythms of the river he once worked beside. Lorna Rooney lounged on the settee, unwrapping a lemon drop with quick, sharp fingers. She was dressed in a neat skirt and blouse, her heels crossed at the ankles, and she laughed sharply at one of Mr. Delaney’s quips.

Mr. Delaney, or Frank as everyone but Addy called him, swept in from the hall, brushing snow from his coat and hair. “Would you believe they’ve barely touched the roads? Took me half the day to make it back from Portsmouth!” He hung his coat on the rack, leaving a wet patch on the polished floorboards.

Addy suppressed a frown, knowing Mrs. Hudson would mop it up later without a word of complaint. She would have come through the back door herself, thinking of Mrs. Hudson’s work, but Mr. Delaney never seemed to notice such things.

“Coffee, Myrna?” he asked as he settled onto the sofa.

Mrs. Hudson rose with a nod, a glimmer of amusement in her eyes. “Of course, Frank. Always coffee for you.”

The exchange was lighthearted and full of laughter. Mr. Freeman gave Lorna a tin of lemon drops, which she held up triumphantly. “How did you know?” she teased, her tone sardonic. Addy received a notebook from Lorna, and when she flipped it open, she found humorous advice penned in Lorna’s neat handwriting: Never trust a man with a better manicure than yours.

Addy’s gift to Mr. Delaney—a gaudy red tie—drew a round of laughter as he held it up with mock solemnity. “You’ve outdone yourself, Addy,” he said, winking at her. She managed a polite smile, though she felt a strange mix of fascination and unease about him.

After the gifts had been exchanged, Addy stood to leave. “I’d better head to bed. School tomorrow.”

“Wait a moment,” Mrs. Hudson said, pulling an envelope from the mantel. “This came for you.”

Addy took it, puzzled by the address: Mrs. Hudson’s name, not hers. Inside was a Christmas card from her parents, their handwriting familiar and cheerful as they described their adventures in Mississippi. They wrote about their plans for pecan pie on Christmas Eve at a diner Addy remembered well. Her stomach tightened at the memory of that sweet, buttery pie.

Then Mrs. Hudson handed her a small box. “Your parents sent these.”

Addy opened it to find a pile of pecans nestled inside. Tears pricked her eyes.

“I thought we could bake them into a pie for Christmas Day,” Mrs. Hudson said softly.

Addy nodded quickly, clutching the box and card to her chest. “Thank you. I—I’d better go.” She hurried upstairs, her throat tight with emotion. Only when she climbed into bed did it strike her as odd that the card had come through Mrs. Hudson first. But she was too warm, too tired, and too overwhelmed to dwell on it long before sleep claimed her.

I said:

I like this version much better. Can you keep it the same except add in two other prompts I forgot to insert, either the concept of or the actual words, “Fizzy sparkle” and “Redolence.”

ChatGPT said:

Certainly! Here’s the revised version incorporating “fizzy sparkle” and “redolence” into the narrative.

Christmas Gathering [Note: ChatGPT added this little “title” tag/heading.]